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Post by Speed » Thu Oct 04, 2007 7:48 am

I do better then that and I'm one of the worst spriters here

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Post by The Eddie Stilson » Thu Feb 11, 2016 1:08 am

In 2007 I made a videogame sprite comic called "Donkey Kong Grand Adventures". It did not go over well with the VGF community. Yes it may have been a tad amateurish (I was 11 years old) but the criticism was even more amateurish. Anyone with a good eye could see there was potential. So ever since then I have been honing my skills as an artist and a writer. I have explored many forms of art. I currently attend an art school on the east coast (The Pennsylvania College of Art & Design) as a Graphic Design major. So much has changed. So now VGF, I present to you the new Donkey Kong Grand Adventures:

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I hope you all enjoyed. I have some other projects I'm working on right now so it might be a bit before the series is complete. Along with school and this series I'm working on some photography projects. This is a current photograph of myself:
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Post by Valigarmander » Thu Feb 11, 2016 1:18 am

Beautiful. Such a perfect ending.
[QUOTE="Valigarmander, post: 857176, member: 30663"]Okay, where to start...

When making sprite comics, saving them as JPEGs are a no-no. They compress the files and make them blurry, which may be good for photographs or something, but not for sprite comics, where we're dealing with video game sprites.

Also, MS Paint paintbrushing is a telltale sign of amateurism and/or halfassery. Also, the font is big and awkward, and should at least be contained in some sort of speech-bubble.

Third, the panels are all different sizes, roughly cut, and placed in awkward positions. Did you use a rusty pair of scissors to make this?

Fourth, I can't tell what the hell is going on. Why the hell does the plane flip in the fourth panel? And while I'm at it... what's going on in the rest of the comic!?

Fifth, unless you do it just right, sprites generally don't mix with real photos. Jay Resop can do this (sort of). But K. Rool standing on top a photographed jet plane just doesn't look natural, or professional.

Sixth, the dialogue is poorly-written. Ever hear of punctuation? Also, the dialogue is bland and boring. Why not add some character to your character?

Finally... SO. MUCH. EMPTY. WHITE. SPACE. A sure sign of amateurism, and of the fact that the artist just got his hands on the latest copy of MS Paint 3000. There's no need for all that, or the huge text at the bottom. All of the text could have been shrunken down to make it less obnoxious.

I'm not being mean, I'm just giving you criticism. I'm not so sure right now, but perhaps with work this comic will turn out to be something great. Until then, keep working on it. Also, welcome to the forum.[/QUOTE]
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Post by Superyoshi » Thu Feb 11, 2016 1:42 am

I like it too
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Post by Zubrun » Thu Feb 11, 2016 1:51 am

As a 17 year old from South Dakota I hope I also one day move to Pennsylvania and be a professional sprite cartoonist like you but I will beat you one day

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Post by New! Tazy Ten » Thu Feb 11, 2016 4:28 am

Where are all these people coming from...?

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Post by LOOT » Thu Feb 11, 2016 4:33 am

South Dakota sucks give it up

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Post by е и ժ е я » Thu Feb 11, 2016 10:29 am

Hey I recognize that picture aren't you that Mikhail Cena guy it's so nice to finally meet you[DOUBLEPOST=1455200980,1455200771][/DOUBLEPOST][QUOTE="Zubrun, post: 1585955, member: 40229"]As a 17 year old from South Dakota I hope I also one day move to Pennsylvania and be a professional sprite cartoonist like you but I will beat you one day[/QUOTE]
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Post by Gumchum » Thu Feb 11, 2016 2:20 pm

I'm so glad I got a notification for this.

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Post by I REALLY HATE POKEMON! » Fri Feb 12, 2016 11:45 am

Do all 11 year olds write like...11 year olds?

Also, episode 3 is the only one to make me laugh at all and I think it was unintentional. Something about DK's strained dialogue and Diddy's simple response was great.

"OK"

You should go with that and make it the series' strength. Your new one looks great but I prefer the crappiness of the originals, personally. Take my opinion with a grain of salt.

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Post by Zubrun » Sat Feb 13, 2016 10:26 pm

[QUOTE="I REALLY HATE POKEMON!, post: 1586146, member: 18119"]I think it was unintentional. [/QUOTE] ok

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Post by I REALLY HATE POKEMON! » Sat Feb 13, 2016 10:33 pm

[QUOTE="Zubrun, post: 1586321, member: 40229"]ok[/QUOTE]

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Post by The Eddie Stilson » Mon Feb 15, 2016 6:35 pm

[QUOTE="I REALLY HATE POKEMON!, post: 1586146, member: 18119"]Do all 11 year olds write like...11 year olds?[/QUOTE]

[QUOTE="Valigarmander, post: 1585947, member: 30663"]
Wow, I was a dick nine years ago.[/QUOTE]

I was surprised that no one realized this was joke and the ticked off criticisms.

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Post by I REALLY HATE POKEMON! » Wed Feb 17, 2016 4:27 am

[QUOTE="The Eddie Stilson, post: 1586542, member: 34574"]I was surprised that no one realized this was joke and the ticked off criticisms.[/QUOTE]

The grammar holocaust was a joke?

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#55

Post by X-3 » Wed Feb 17, 2016 4:33 am

Well, these truly have been the Donkey Kong Grand Adventures.

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